Contd from : But will he return or not?-Part 4
“Just that the murderer might have been a woman,” he replied in a hushed voice.
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“What is it that you need?” Devyani’s sudden outburst took her mother by surprise.
She quietly went about doing her kitchen chores.
“Mummy, why are you so hell bent on making my life hell!” But Devyani inched up her volume and carried on.
“I only thought you needed rest and hence I asked him to come later,” her mother replied very quietly.
“I was in my room reading. And you knew that. Why did you lie to him?” She was almost shivering with anger now.
Her mother turned slowly, she stared at Devyani for a while before finally speaking, “I don’t think that boy is a good influence on you.”
“I am not here to take orders from you. I am not you, a door mat. And please remember that,” she finished speaking these words and stormed out of the kitchen.
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Despite all troubles that rocked her marriage, Rajlakshmi never gave up. After all where else could she go? What else could she do?
“Will you ever understand what is the basic difference between whiskey and rum? I said rum and coke. What is inside your head? Wood?” and her husband in response too never gave up, on humiliating her.
A doormat. Is that what she called me? I wonder why? Rajlakshmi thought.
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“Oh she is strange, very strange,” Azhar spoke in a lighthearted tone.
“What do you even mean by that?” Rehana, his sister asked.
“One moment she is the most talkative girl you will ever meet. And in next second all of a sudden, a mute spectator,” he remarked.
“That’s just how usually girls are,” she replied in jest.
“No that is not the case. She is very strange,” he replied very seriously.
contd at In a way, a burden-Part 6
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Why so less…a few more lines !! u r keeping me on tenterhooks Richa π
hehe yes yes point taken you will get more lines this time π
Sad for Rajlakshmi, both her husband and daughter treat her so badly.
Rehana… new character. This is getting quite interesting! Give us more! π
Yes characters will increase for sure …. I hope it keeps things interesting too π
This is great! I love the idea of writing a novel within the month on your blog. Captivating story, I will have to read what I have missed so far the last five days.
Thanks Jeanie I hope you liked all the parts as well π
Rehana will add a new dimension to the story. But who is the murderer? will have to wait………………..
yes will have to wait Kalpana π
Waiting for the mystery to unravel. In the meantime I think its a nice smooth pace. I feel sorry for Rajlakshmi too. I think she deserves better. And what’s with Azhar? Lets find that out now! Shall we?
Shall we? perhaps yes π
K now can u make each part bit lengthier plss
Pakka promise!
Seriously, a bit more lengthier….pleaseeeeee….
for sure this time you guys will get more!!
I am totally in love with this series, its like watching House or Sherlock or Breaking Bad or something… this is some great piece of fiction.. All the best… I believe, I am gonna come back…. π
Thanks a lot, means a lot to me π good to have you here π
Hey Richa….I feel for Rajalakshmi. It’s so hard to be caught in an unhappy marriage with no where to turn.
Yes it is very hard to be caught in such things…
I feel bad for Rajalakshmi. No one deserves to be treated that way. Your story is captivating…can’t wait for more! ♥
Thanks Kathy π And yes no one deserves to be treated that way…..
Felt really sorry for Rajalakshmi and a new character … but yes like the others, please make the posts a little bit longer π
Yes a new character and perhaps many more will come… and longer part for sure π
Richa this is getting mysterious by the minute…just ready part 2-5 in a breath… What next??
Wait for part 6!!
You know what is happiness? ? Happiness is when you get to read five chapters back to back of a real lovely story.
Looking forward to more π
Awww so cute π <3 You are a sweetheart you know π
I was away from the machine for a few days and missed out on reading these. Caught up on all now π Would love to see where you take this now that you have 3 women characters introduced.
Thanks Seeta π I hope you like what comes next as well π
Glad I’m following this!
You narrate really well, Richa π
And thanks for the tag :*
Thanks Aayesha π I am happy you are enjoying this π
When’s the next one coming out! Can’t wait π
Each day a new part π
Very well etched and the characters so well defined. Liked the way you’ve worked out the different personality clashes..lively and real.
Thanks Vishal, always trying to attempt this, happy I succeeded..
Girl, add few more lines…. π
Awwie pakka pakka!