Sixty words! Yes exactly sixty words. When Mrs Young returned our first precis writing test copies, the results were very interesting. Only ten percent had achieved the passing marks and that too they had received exactly a four out of ten. Rest of us had flunked the test with flying colours.
It was back then at fifteen that I first understood. The trick of the trade is to write a shorter format. A short story is any day more difficult than a novel. And if there is anything that makes my head turn the most its a 55er. It was in blogging that I came across this style of writing and needless to say, it left me wanting for more. Quite literally.
Today as a part of Write Tribe’s prompt, I present my humble attempts of 55 fiction.
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The blood on her lips spoke a story. It was not the first time.
I walked in and sat next to her. She only stared at me with that strange expression.
The bruises on my hand spelled an end. She knew what I had done.
Still,I had to tell her.
“Mother, I killed Dad.”
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The flight had just about taken off. I was reading a magazine when a flight attendant appeared and spoke, “Mam would you please follow us?”
I nervously extracted myself out.
Before I could ask more she took me inside the cockpit.
“Will you marry me?” Arun’s sweet smile and words brought tears to my eyes.
Nice stories…catharsis is too good 🙂
Thank you so much 🙂
Loved them both..
1. Its really sad that someone has to ill their own kin.
2. That’s utterly cute…awwwwww!
I am so glad you liked them Kajal 🙂
The first one was scary.The second one is soooooooo sweet and romantic. oh! WHAT A PLACE TO PROPOSE.
I know! I would want a proposal like that! (now though its too late :P)
Aww what a sweet proposal. Warmed my heart.
Thanks Suzy 🙂
I loved both of your stories!!!So horrific, so romantic in the second. Both were so brilliant!
Thanks a lot kathy 🙂
I liked Catharsis more. Just could visualise it.. Am not good at this 55 fiction so liking them more
Thanks Afshan! But you must try! Its a lot of fun 🙂
Thanks Zoya 🙂
You know once a airhostess stopped when i was leaving the flight she said “sir can u pls wait for a min” i said “sure”.. I was just thinking what it could be and my fingers were crossed thinking she must liked me or something ;).. And when all other guest left she told me politely sir i loved the soft toy you are carrying (it was a tweety for my sister) i said “have it” she dined i insist and then she said “how much can i have to pay sir” i said “no problem have it”(glass shuttering sound).. Is it really easier to write novel then short stories..? Anyhow good work.
Yes I believe the shorter the format more important each word. Every single syllable should count. So yeah novels need discipline but it can be done, short stories need a lot of brains..my perspective..
Awesome! Both have the charm to capture the reader……..:)
Thanks Shelly 🙂
Umm wow. I was quite excited when email arrived that u have posted a 55er. Now now, the first one was goddamn good. Second one was completely different. So, u fished out two lovely and, must say, refreshing stories out of that brilliant mind of yours.
Actually, you are amongst a few bloggers whom i respect.
Would you believe I thought to mail you the post just in case you missed. 55er toh bachhe ke liye likhna banta hai 😀 😀 And so are you Ritesh 🙂
Umm thanks but u see i stalk u thru email. So i cant miss any post. I had gone for a vacation for a couple of weeks n so missed out on that lesbian wala story. I wud soon be digging deep into ur blog and pluck out those unread pieces….btw, did u finish with that story or is there more parts to come ?
I finished it and I might soon come up with a downloading link to make it easier for people to read in one go… 🙂
Okie great news for your diehard fans
Which is you 😀 😀
loved the twist in the first one.. and second one was sweet and different 🙂
Thanks Suku 🙂
Loved the quick 55 word stories. I enjoyed the 1st over the 2nd, it was creative and well written. Keep it up.
thanks a lot jake 🙂
Both different and so good yaa 🙂 🙂
A proposal inside the cockpit and a son who would go to any lengths to protect his mother!
Thanks Bhavya for such kind words 🙂
Loved the second one. A very nice way to propose someone 🙂
Isnt it? 🙂
🙂 good ones… ping pong of emotions from one to another
Thanks Apoorva jee 🙂
Both are good Richa , the second one was so sweet 🙂
Thanks a lot!!
Woohoo! They are awesome one thrilling and the other one suspense laden love:)
Thanks Vishal 🙂 🙂